Which lead her into believing that it was her fault only. Bad: I longed to be back at my regular routine helping children learn to play baseball… When school started again in September, nobody had such an amazing story of summer exploits and I realized that it never would have happened if I had not done the right thing — not just on August 12, but in May by taking the job at the camp in the first place.
The sentence could easily confuse the reader, because the main focus is unclear. If one makes a solitary wrong move, everyone tends to judge them. Note: A thesis statement amounts to nothing if the paper is not completely focused on that main point.
Give reader something to think about after finishing essay.
It was a friendly neighbourhood: when they climbed out of their window back in the spring, an old lady brought them home before Ruth even knew they were gone. PROOF: her leaking wet body that had betrayed her.
Is it obvious that you understand the text you are analyzing?
By the end of this paragraph you want to have a powerful thesis.